Tuesday

Class Work

1. Submit Essay #1. Place the final copy on top of the draft, peer editing sheet, and prewriting page (if available).
2.  Description - Five senses

• Take out the draft of the paragraphs you wrote about an object of your choice. Place it face up on the table.
•  Place the object or the picture of your object in the middle of your table.
• Swap places with a student at a different table. You will read that student's paper. That student will read your paper. Sign at the end of the paper as the editor.
• Look for description that focuses on sight, sound, touch, taste, or smell. See p. 123 for an example of how to mark the paper. (Exercise #1) Which sense was noted the most? Was that appropriate? Did the description fully describe the object?
• What did you like most about the description?
• What suggestions can you offer?
• Return to your chair, object, and paper.

3. Let's take about organization - what is the best way to organize a description?

• top to bottom
• bottom to top
• near to far
• far to near
• left to right
• right to left

Look at the sample paragraphs on p. 125. Which paragraph is logically organized? What pattern was used?

Also see:
http://grammar.about.com/od/developingparagraphs/a/samdescpars.htm


4. For homework, revise and expand your description as needed. Work on the organization. Use MLA formatting for the page. See last Thursday's blog for MLA instructions. Bring the final copy of the object description along with the draft to class on Thursday.

5. From Thursday's homework . . . question #5 on p. 129. Let's discuss.
6. Let's look at the sample essay on 129, "Juke Joint".
7. Get Specific! See p. 81 - Using Specific Detail  - Exercise 7 on P. 83 - one will be assigned to each table. Also Exercise 9 on p. 85 - again one will be assigned to each table.
8. Now, we are going outside. See p. 131 - Small Scrawl 2. Remember, the goal is to focus on ONE thing or area and write the details. In writing, create a dominate impression. See p. 132 for sample words that create an impression. If you have a camera or a camera on your phone, take a picture of the place. Return to class and share your writing. (We will complete this in class on Thursday...weather permitting.)
9. One more sample... http://www.iup.edu/page.aspx?id=61881
10. Creating a dominate mood... practice...(handout)

A.      The card players sat around the table. The table was old. The players were, too.
B.      A long line formed outside the movie theater. People didn’t want to miss the show. The movie had received a lot of attention recently.
C.      A girl walked down the street in her first pair of high heels. This was a new experience for her

Directions: Revise each of the sentence blocks above twice. The first time, create an unmistakable mood; the second time, create a sharply contrasting mood. To convey atmosphere, vary sentence structure, use vigorous verbs, and provide rich sensory details.

Homework
1. See p. 132. Select Descriptive Essay #1 or #3. Write the essay. This should be at least three paragraphs long. Create a dominate impression. Use the five senses. Bring the draft to class on Thursday.

2. See #3 above. Complete as described. (Final copy of the Object Description)

3. Finish #8 from the classwork. Expland your description. Bring a somewhat finished copy to class. (Outside Description) Postponed