Day 3 - Tuesday, all day long!

Class Work (Homework is in GREEN!)

1. Please give me your mind-map! It was part of the essay about you.
2. Let's look at a couple of the group description from Thursday . . .
3. Peer editing activity: 

• Either have a paper copy of your "object" description, or call it up on the computer screen.
• You were to describe the object in detail. This included sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell as appropriate.
• You need ONE partner for this activity.
• Show the object of the picture of the object to your partners. The tallest person in the pair goes first.
• Then, with both of you looking at the paper, read your description to your partner. Do not stop, just read.
• Partner - LISTEN.
• Reader - read the paper again. This time, stop at the end of each sentence and ask the listener if there are any questions. You are looking for additional information that you could add to your description. What did you miss?
• Listener - DO ask questions. For example, if you partner has written that the object is "kind of small," ask for specifics. Is it two inches long? Does is weigh less than an ounce? Can it be compared to something else that is that size? ASK! Note the questions.
• Then, switch roles. If you were the reader, you are now the listener. If you were the listener, you are now the reader. Follow the steps described above.
• Please sign your partner's paper and note that you were the listener.

4. Once the editing activity is over, be sure to get your paper and the questions back. If it is on the screen, be sure to save the questions and your partner's signature.

5. As a class, let's look at a professional writer's description of a notebook. Silently read the essay to yourself. Underline or high-light at least three examples of strong and specific description. Write your favorite line of description on a post-it and stick it to the board along the "line." These are the most powerful lines in the paper! Let's see if we agree.

6. Class discussion:

• How is this essay different from your object description?
• How is it similar? What are the commonalities?
• What do you need to add to your essay to make it more powerful?

7. What you have is an idea for a better paper. Now, add the story. Put yourself into it. After all, it is your object! You can tell how you came to own the object. Perhaps you can tell the story of a time when the object came in handy. You could speculate how your life would change if you did not own the object.

8. For HOMEWORK, write Draft 2 of your object essay. Add the narration - the story. Let the reader see the object in action with YOU. Post the draft to Canvas by the beginning of class on Thursday. ALSO, bring a paper copy. Do not toss DRAFT 1. I will want both drafts attached to your final copy later next week. I want to see the growth.

9. Grammar moment:  Let's meet the FANBOYS!
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/conjunctions.htm
http://www.grammar-quizzes.com/8-3punc.html
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/powerpoint.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/quiz_list.htm See #s 73, 74, 75, 76, 77. Practice any two with a partner. Practice two others for homework.