Day 6 - Thursday

Class Work

1. Quiz...It is time to prove that you know how to avoid run-on sentences and comma splices.
2. Log into MyWritingLab - you need your own pass code!

• Course Name: ENG091 1:00pm
• Course ID: eaton8873

Let's get started.

3. More news about introductions...
You need to:

• Introduce your topic
• Engage your readers with:
• Startling statistics
• Interesting quotations
• News events
• Song lyrics
• Poetry lines
• Personal stories
• Useful facts
• "Stuff" from popular culture
• Link the topic to the reader. Why does the reader need to know this? How will the information be useful?
• Orient them to the organization of your essay - in this case, the chronological approach works best.
• Here are some additional tips: http://itdc.lbcc.edu/oer/esl/esl33xal/presentations/introductoryparagraphs/introductoryparagraphs-notes.html

Let's take a look at some introductions:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/intros.htm
http://students.berkeley.edu/apa/personalstatement/introductions.html You be the judge.

4. The first sentence is critical. Let's take a look at some sample first lines. Again, judge the writer! Is the sentence strong enough for you to want to read the rest of the essay? Discuss your assigned sentence at your table. Agree on the effectiveness of the sentence. Be ready to share with the class. What makes the first line strong or weak? If it is not a strong sentence, what is needed to make it so? If it is strong, what makes it so?

1. There always seems to be some sort of controversy or skepticism when a newcomer pops up in the medical field, especially if that newcomer offers methods that differ from conventional practice.
2. One of the first lessons you'll learn if you spend any time with Trace Waters is that it's never a good idea to judge people based on stereotypes.
3. At first, it wasn't even an argument.
4. On weekend graveyard shifts at St. Joseph's Hospital I worked the emergency room, mopping up pools of blood and carting plastic bags stuffed with arms, legs, and hands to the outdoor incinerator.
5. "The point of books is to combat loneliness, David Foster Wallace observes near the beginning of "Although of Course You End Up Becoming Yourself," David Lipsky's recently published, book-length interview with him.
6. America's "boy crisis" has been canceled.
7. It's been muttered for some time now in feminist academic circles that the "boy crisis" - the near-ubiquitous belief that our nation's boys are being academically neglected and emotionally persecuted by teachers whose training, style and temperament favor girls - is little more than a myth."
8. Stuck in horrible traffic on the New Jersey Turnpike last weekend, I didn't have much to look at other than the other slowly moving cars.

(All sentences come from sample essays in Write Now by Daniel Anderson.)

5. Revisiting your introductory paragraph - REVISE it. Bring the sentence to class on Tuesday.
6. Map out the rest of the essay. What are the steps? Create an informal outline of the rest of your paper leading up to the conclusion. You may create a flow chart. (20 pts.)(Class activity on flow charts.) http://images.search.yahoo.com/search/images?_adv_prop=image&fr=yfp-t-122-s&va=flow+charts+examples

Remember, you must select a topic that is appropriate for the general college reading audience. We are a public institution that receives public money. Topics that share information about how to drink, take drugs, or engage in other dangerous or illegal activities are not appropriate topics.